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Snowflakes crash in the air of night
so still we call it 'peace,'
and far away in hay-filled stalls
comes a baby's hungry pleas.

For some, he was a god, a king.
For some, he was a foe.
For some, he was the perfect tool
to themselves better know.

How could he have done things so great
that many call him 'Christ'?
Could he have not just been one man's
unfeeling sacrifice?

But he is still with us, all around,
atop his bloody cross.
Around a neck or through an ear,
his image never lost.

Each night as they kneel in a prayer
that's always in his name,
I cannot help but feel, again,
my heart, apart, abstains

From what they claim that I should feel,
From their holy spirit.
From what I've come to feel is wrong,
and, in it's wrongness, fear it.
©2004-2010 ~Tiger--eyes
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Author's Comments

I realize the title's not very original, and I hate it. But I'm not entirely sure I care enough to change it.
This poem doesn't mean much to me, though I suppose it should. Rip it to pieces if you want to; it's not very good.
Written for ~scrawled

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:iconz4k:
Wow, Words cannot express the feeling in this poem. Nicely written :)

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:icontiger--eyes:
Thanks. And what feeling was that, do you think?

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woww, you captured my emotions right now perfectly. thanks a lot for this poem. it just put into words what i couldn't. thanks a lot again :+fav+
:icontiger--eyes:
Glad to be of service. :)

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:iconmarcaisa:
I love the last stanza; it's something about the last line, heheh. Awesome job, the concept is fabulous, and your use of language is aswell. :)

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This is absolutley amazing, the concept revolving around christ And the two last lines were just amazing. However, the poem was amazing in it's self. Too bad it doesn't mean too much to you... But it's a very well written piece. I :heart: it..

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:icontiger--eyes:
Thanks. :)

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I'm a poet. Take a look: [link]
Member of ~scrawled
The less real I am to you, the more perfect you can make me.
:icontiger--eyes:
Thanks very much. I'm glad it means something to you -- it doesn't to me. It was too forced to mean anything. Anyway, glad you liked it.

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I'm a poet. Take a look: [link]
Member of ~scrawled
The less real I am to you, the more perfect you can make me.
:iconmarcaisa:
Anyday! :nod:

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It's not a promise 'til it's scrawled in ink.
I'm moving! My new account is ~line-in-the-sand; hope to see you there! :D

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